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Ubove me is the dark glittering sky
Beneath me is the bright green grass
Around me trees became oranges and lime
I just sat there wondering
What is wrong with this time?
It's so cold and bitter
Nothing is warm
All snowy
All soaky

Oh well...
All predicted, set, and known
By the Almighty

But, why then do I feel so cold?
Why so dark this night seems?!
Why am I frozen by this...
dewed grass beneath me?!!!
I started for my coat..
Then I thought, Why bother?
The sun will rise soon..
So I layed my back again on the grass, smiled
And stared at the stars
Waiting for the sun to rise
©2008-2009 ~NomaNoma
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:iconspriglief:
Nothing against the poem, but it is a little known fact that you can die of exposure with the temp above freezing. To go to sleep in the conditions you discribed might be fatal. In this situation, the person should fight sleep at all cost.

Note: This is how some native tribes elders choose to leave this world when they think they have become a burden to the family and tribe. It is actually a peaceful way to die. Near the end you feel a warmth that is not there and go gentle to sleep, never wake up.
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I love sprigliefs comments. :D
Keep them coming, and you ought to join the ZU magazine. All they have is crap and the girls surely can’t write. You go ahead and kick their ass woman D

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I will dig a hole and label it love
And trick her to fall in from above
Strategically placed at the front door
I'll coax her to come back to get more
*PastDervishandBanges
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With you I always learn things for the first time, and this is new to me. Well, of course the conditions in the poem are to set a theme and mood for both the reader and I. I hope nobody tries this though.

Thnx a lot for your comment :D

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"Because she believes in miracles...
Miracles begin to happen.

Because she believes in love...
that love appears. "


Warrior of Light- Paolo Coelho
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Honey you just gave me a great idea. I think I'll have a word with them next semester :D

Thnx for stopping by

--
"Because she believes in miracles...
Miracles begin to happen.

Because she believes in love...
that love appears. "


Warrior of Light- Paolo Coelho

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